Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
As some people may hold the view that the main concentration of universities should focus on the academic activities; however, other may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that additional issues such as sport and social interaction are as vital as the educational issues. I personally agree with the second belief. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons which persuade me to put forward this perspective.
The first exquisite reason which advocates my perspective is the importance of health in the students' daily life. Unfortunately, at the most of the prestige and high ranked universities, where the spotlight sheds on the scientific aspect of training, the majority of students forget the value of the healthy lifestyle. Since the main concern of this group is learning and studying; moreover, this condition impels them to the less physical activities and more usage of junk foods. Consequently after a period they face the problem such as obesity or another type of health issue. According to the noteworthy intelligible survey conducted in my country more than sixty-nine percent of the university students from Tehran suffer the high-blood pressure and diabetes after five years from their graduation; in addition, the basic cause of this incidence is their eating habit at the university duration. So, it illustrates the importance of the sport and physical activities at the educational schedule.
The second reason is by focusing on the social activities, the students become more extroverted. It is lucidly explicit that lack of social interaction with the surrounding is one of the serious problems of the modern life. As a result, if the students are encouraged to enhance their social activities, they will have a chance to become a more social person. Especially, by considering the high-ranked universities which require arduous preparation for its application and the students do have no any choice except limiting their social activities and doing the study, those classes with extra activities such as social interaction are really necessary for them. Since an intelligent, graduated student with no background in the social life and communication is considered as an abortive individual in the society.
Another equally noteworthy point supporting my idea is that the graduated with proliferated resume in the various issues are more likely to find an appropriate job with high income. It is lucidly obvious that big portion of the population of each society has this opportunity to study at the university, while there is a list of options which paves the path for academic study. Thus, most of the people have a diploma from the university. In this situation, as they are in the same condition, an employer who is looking for the workforce will put emphasis on the other points such as the capability of good social interaction. A vivid example can be given to shed light on the subject is my brother's example. He is graduated from a good university with high GPA. However, he is timid and does not have a flexible connection with his surroundings. After the university, he could not find a decent work to be responsible for his life cost, till he overcame his shyness.
To wrap it up, based on aforementioned reasons, one can logically draw the conclusion that it is a fundamental requirement from universities to put the same emphasis on the sport and social activities and academic issues. As a result, after graduation the society possesses the young who are healthy, sociable, and successful in their job.
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Discourse Markers used:
['consequently', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'moreover', 'really', 'second', 'so', 'thus', 'while', 'in addition', 'such as', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.231861198738 0.229887763892 101% => OK
Verbs: 0.119873817035 0.158761421928 76% => OK
Adjectives: 0.129337539432 0.0866891130778 149% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0347003154574 0.046263068375 75% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0473186119874 0.0685040099705 69% => OK
Prepositions: 0.13880126183 0.118717715034 117% => OK
Participles: 0.0252365930599 0.0351676179071 72% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.99585615814 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0173501577287 0.0309702414327 56% => OK
Particles: 0.00157728706625 0.00188951952338 83% => OK
Determiners: 0.140378548896 0.0887237588012 158% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0141955835962 0.0209618222197 68% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0110410094637 0.0139019557991 79% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3582.0 2387.08602151 150% => OK
No of words: 581.0 408.028673835 142% => OK
Chars per words: 6.165232358 5.86048508987 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90957651803 4.48200974243 110% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.370051635112 0.338922669872 109% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.292598967298 0.251872472559 116% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.228915662651 0.174417080927 131% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.166953528399 0.112833075102 148% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99585615814 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 287.0 212.727598566 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493975903614 0.524397521467 94% => OK
Word variations: 60.5658351406 59.2087087015 102% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6684587814 116% => OK
Sentence length: 24.2083333333 20.5533526081 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.0579610658 48.84282405 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.25 120.699889404 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2083333333 20.5533526081 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.625 0.644075263715 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 53.4682300631 45.7405998639 117% => OK
Elegance: 1.9609375 1.45489161554 135% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279284257132 0.300154397459 93% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.119566590645 0.103427244359 116% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0706422205205 0.0752933317313 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.558668789657 0.497263757937 112% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.153843527832 0.151897553556 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117139043233 0.114077575197 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0766261008374 0.0781384742642 98% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.489545246213 0.336927656856 145% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0508354250086 0.067059652881 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229006036712 0.210909579961 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0595794569939 0.0618886996521 96% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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