Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Even though there is a prevailing view that just libraries and other educational systems should receive financial support, I strongly recommend that government should pay more attention to social activities because of three main reasons. Social activities such as sports have direct effects on health of the community. In addition, we need them to intensify our culture and social relationship. And believe it or not, we need them to strengthen our policy with government.
First of all, having a healthy community obviously depends on the rate of social activities within that community. Exercises and sports significantly protect us against many diseases and detrimental effects of modern technology such as computer, television and car transportation. Moreover, if we improve our physical and mental health and our well-being, therefore we can achieve our goals and we can learn better. For instance, my company dedicates money for some activities such as sports. We can go to club two days in a week and when we come back we have a lot of energy, vigor, and vitality so that we can see its effects on our efficiency and our productivity.
Moreover, if we see a community with high cultural values and great civilization, we can find a lot of social activities there. Nowadays technology, television and other media have a considerable influence on our cultural values. Nevertheless, we can’t disregard effects of some social activities. For example, there are some NGO groups that effort to collect debris and contaminants from mountains and shores. These groups are representatives of a civilized society.
Last but not least, as all of us know in modern societies everyone has a prominent role in politics, for this reason some parties and groups must be existed to educate people. One of the key factors in democracy is having different parties. We need them; because we must increase our knowledge and information about the social institutions, legislation, foreign policies and social norms to choose reliable and responsible candidates.
All things considered, health, culture and politics are dramatically relied on social activities. As an engineer my primary concerns are lack of social activities. Nonetheless, as I became more sophisticated over the years, my preferences and my conceptions may be gradually changed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...strengthen our policy with government. First of all, having a healthy community...
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... can achieve our goals and we can learn better. For instance, my company dedicates mon...
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...n our efficiency and our productivity. Moreover, if we see a community with hig...
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...epresentatives of a civilized society. Last but not least, as all of us know in...
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...amatically relied on social activities. As an engineer my primary concerns are lac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, then, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1986.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38211382114 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12201003031 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577235772358 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8940436045 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.3 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.45 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115594784836 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0391236250297 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0532443078918 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.07485208139 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0736986310046 0.0645574589148 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.