Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.Use specific reasons
Generally speaking students at universities and colleges are involved in several academy and extracurricular activities. The issue of whether social activities and sports are just as relevant as classes and libraries, which should be equally financially supported is a very controversial one. On one hand, supporters of this maintain that sports and social activities help students to improve the concentration and also are beneficial for students health. On the other hand, critics of this claims that social activities and sports do not have the same relevance as classes and libraries. I maintain the opinion that sports and social activities are very beneficial for students.
To begin with, sport and social activities at colleges and universities help students improving concentration, which is very important on this level education. Students could be under extreme pressure when they have to study for many subjects at the same time. Other situations, like living a dorm with other students and work in a part time job to pay university expenses represents some of the students new challenges. Sports could help to release stress and students become more comfortable on campus. For example, when I studied Pharmacy in the University of Havana in Cuba I took six classes in my freshman year, that was a complete disaster. Although I did not failed on any of them on the first semester It represents a challenged for me. At the beginning of the second semester my Math professor made me a suggestion about to join the volleyball team because she knew that I felt a lot of passion for that sport. After a month practicing volleyball I realized that I was able to pay more attention to my regular classes. Also I improve my grades in a very significant way which help me to get a internship in chemistry. I really recommend that universities should support financially sports as well as they do with classes and libraries.
In addition, students at universities and colleges could receive important health benefits practicing sports and participating in social activities. Even though universities and colleges give students a well balance nutrition at the cafeteria, some of them prefer to order junk fast food in other to gain time to study. For instance, social activities and sports could be very beneficial for students health. For example, if universities plan in their curricular activities a mandatory time for sports it would encourage students to practice sports and prevent them to suffer from high blood pressure, obesity or diabetes. Social activities in the community are extremely important in order to move out students from campus. There are not doubt that sports and social activities improve students life at universities and colleges.
In conclusion, although some oppose to the financial support to sports and social activities should be the same as class and libraries, I maintain that universities and colleges should do. I think that every university or college should join efforts in order to support sports and social activities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, really, second, so, well, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, as well as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2575.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 494.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21255060729 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96998885712 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.437246963563 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 810.9 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.1504418001 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.956521739 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4782608696 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5652173913 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 23.0 5.5376344086 415% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304603268368 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113562165004 0.076458572812 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0928969333706 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23177301353 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0491910043536 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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