Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I profoundly do believe that sports and other social activities including clubs, organization and interested groups should take financial aids from their university and colleges. When all students were asked about whether they attend any other activities beside of classes, they would answer definitely yes. On the other hand, school libraries are also important as classes for sure, but I don't agree that they should receive equal financial supports for few reasons discussed in below.
To begin with, there is no doubt that extra school activities require more expenses than any other things. They offer students a great opportunity to develop close ties with students, choose your interested group which could be your favorite one or challenging new one. For example, when I was a student in Mongolian National University, I attended a group which aims to help younger girls and boys who live in orphanage center. Every Tuesday, our group members gathered in front of school and headed to the orphanage center which located in suburban side of city. We usually taught mathematics for students who suffering to solve math problem. Our university provided us with transportation, books for everyone and stationery stuffs. I've fully realized that expense was pretty higher than any other organization of our school.
Furthermore, these activities give a chance to build strong social communication, teach how to work efficiently in group and allows us to improve our individual development. It is widely believed that every student should participate at least one activity in order to undergo university hard time easily. In my experience, sport activities helped to sustain my energy and encouraged me to face any issue straightforwardly. I used to play tennis in my University tennis club, and it was the best moment I enjoyed a lot and felt refreshed.
Last but not the least, Library could bring enormous benefits for students to accumulate proper knowledge. It suggests best environment to learn and keep pace with latest research, papers and materials. Every school provides us tons of book, therefore, it is not necessary to spend exact same investment. From my perspective, library should take constant financial aids for new books, library staffs and book shelves.
From all the discussion mentioned below, we can draw the conclusion that Universities social activities could bring plenty beneficial impacts such as suggesting good place for free time and help students to develop communication skills. That’s why these activity groups deserve higher investment of financial support.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, so, therefore, at least, for example, no doubt, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2196.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38235294118 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86961554693 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615196078431 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 683.1 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5058223557 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.8 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.65 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226409982968 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0634359193514 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0657527121953 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127696894245 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0703703825182 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.