Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Now days, Children spend a large percentage of their time doing activities that new technologies have brough about for them, for instance playing with apparatus like tablets and cellphones and also other network features. In this respect, in numerous circles of pedagogical experts, there has been always a heated debate as wether educating children is difficult task today, or it was more sophisticated in the past. I for one, welcome the letter opinion and oppose the advocates on the other extreme of the rope. In what follows will explain my point of view.
To commence, working with technical appliances and devices enhance children skills leading to high level of IQ as they are just analogous to exercise for mind which help them to learn and be taught efficiently. To be successful in coping with this technical instrument children need to memorize and grasp variety of information in different fields, for example how to open the program or install the games. Such information would augment their knowledge which could be useful in further education. Virtual social groups, in addition elevates their EQ level and in turn cognitive process of their mind. So they will be able to absorb materials soon as well as communicate with teachers and convey their concepts. In fact, they become extroverted and easily could ask their problems and discuss issues in the class. Thus to be thriving in virtual environment, they should precipitate their reflexes to stimuluses, at the wake of that they will be simply teachable.
Another equally significant point to be mentioned is that virtual environment which are included computerized games and social medias persuade them to increase their knowledge in order to become prosperous persons in future life. Such games provide them with a lot of insight into the real world So they will be enthusiastically euphoric to learn new things and maybe try their time out to speed up their learning outcomes. They also could narrow their way through being flourished individual, since they exactly know their desires and their demands. Personally speaking, one time I asked my nephew about her imaginary job, she answered that she wants to be a game maker because it is a well-paid jobs and when I was curious why she made this decision, she mentioned that she has learned from biographies in games introductions. she has started to study really hard. So I think such knowledge from virtual environment address extensive impetus for children to learn easily.
To sum up, based on the discussion and by taking all the aforementioned ideas into consideration, it can easily uphold that social network and computerized games help teachers to educate students better through their preoccupation in learning and in addition things that they have learnt before. I recommend to take a fresh look at this issue based on new surveys.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 814, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...oblems and discuss issues in the class. Thus to be thriving in virtual environment, ...
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Line 3, column 829, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: She
...rom biographies in games introductions. she has started to study really hard. So I ...
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Line 4, column 298, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommend taking'.
Suggestion: recommend taking
... things that they have learnt before. I recommend to take a fresh look at this issue based on new...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, may, really, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in fact, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2401.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1085106383 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76569638703 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565957446809 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 736.2 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.7977696365 48.9658058833 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.368421053 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7368421053 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52631578947 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15228333235 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.046403523545 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433241589155 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0981364895767 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0475300626088 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 86.8835125448 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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