Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on the cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
Two primary concerns of the modern parents are their children's education and internet usage. There is a cogent connection among these two elements which can influence the kids in an unavoidable way. While some people are in a conviction that the utilization of internet and technology is harmful to the children; others, on the other hand, believe otherwise. I absolutely agree with the first belief and will cogently explicate my stance on the issue in what follows.
The first reason which shapes my outlook is the decrement of cell phone usage age among the children. Indeed, a decade ago an individual aged 18 or upper possessed a cell phone, which in this condition he was mature enough to know how to use the phone. On the contrast, nowadays, every five years old kid owns a mobile. As he does not have the sufficient understanding of the mobile's utility, he uses in an inaccurate way such as the playing game. A vivid example can be given to shed light on the issue is my and my nephew's instance. I owned my first cell phone when I was 18 years old, and I sole used it for the phone call or texting in the emergency condition. However, my nephew had his mobile is his seventh birthday, and he used it just for the game and chat. This situation led to his failure in his final exams since he could not focus on his studies. This example lucidly demonstrates that the early use of mobile disturbs the children's attention from their education.
The second factor supports my idea is that the easy access of internet is disruptive. In fact, the internet with the high-speed is available everywhere even in the training spot such as the school and the university. According to the noteworthy, intelligence survey conducted in my country, approximately sixty-nine percent of the schools and universities of Iran have the free internet services. Based on this survey, the students are able of using the net for their chat or game in their educational periods. Besides, as it is out of charge and has high-speed, the playing of online games without the pausing can seem more attractive to the students. Therefore, they cannot concentrate on the materials presented in the classes.
Nevertheless, some people may assume that the internet is beneficial to the students' education since they can update their knowledge by the usage of internet. However, they overlook the importance of a subtle point of controlling. Do their internet surfs are controlled by the parents? If it is not managed by the parents, there is no guarantee that the web surf is for the sake of the educational enhancement. Hence, there should be a systematic control over the children's internet uses.
To wrap it up, all aforementioned reasons can lead us to the conclusion that the educating the today's children are an arduous task since the technology and internet usage are accessible by younger children with the less maturity. Also, the free access to the web without the parental observation is a peril for the kids' education.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'besides', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'nevertheless', 'second', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'in fact', 'such as', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.252086811352 0.229887763892 110% => OK
Verbs: 0.113522537563 0.158761421928 72% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0901502504174 0.0866891130778 104% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0350584307179 0.046263068375 76% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0617696160267 0.0685040099705 90% => OK
Prepositions: 0.115191986644 0.118717715034 97% => OK
Participles: 0.0183639398998 0.0351676179071 52% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.92789115623 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0183639398998 0.0309702414327 59% => OK
Particles: 0.0016694490818 0.00188951952338 88% => OK
Determiners: 0.133555926544 0.0887237588012 151% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.016694490818 0.0209618222197 80% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0100166944908 0.0139019557991 72% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3080.0 2387.08602151 129% => OK
No of words: 518.0 408.028673835 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.94594594595 5.86048508987 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77070365392 4.48200974243 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.318532818533 0.338922669872 94% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.256756756757 0.251872472559 102% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.204633204633 0.174417080927 117% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.144787644788 0.112833075102 128% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92789115623 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 273.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527027027027 0.524397521467 101% => OK
Word variations: 64.0608801557 59.2087087015 108% => OK
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6684587814 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.9230769231 20.5533526081 97% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6834368176 48.84282405 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.461538462 120.699889404 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9230769231 20.5533526081 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.615384615385 0.644075263715 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.54480286738 144% => OK
Readability: 45.5987525988 45.7405998639 100% => OK
Elegance: 1.83333333333 1.45489161554 126% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.414753210941 0.300154397459 138% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.107177359985 0.103427244359 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0638020004273 0.0752933317313 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.5503287268 0.497263757937 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.141644195708 0.151897553556 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.172850750131 0.114077575197 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.069725012258 0.0781384742642 89% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.523058570788 0.336927656856 155% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0517203572091 0.067059652881 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.302273931145 0.210909579961 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.030187209001 0.0618886996521 49% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8870967742 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.91756272401 244% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 8.0 2.75985663082 290% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 13.6433691756 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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