Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
All of us know that job is one of the importance part of everyone's life. We need some abilities for acquiring an ample job such as having adequate knowledge that for it one must study at a school very properly, and also has strong ability for communication with others. However, most people argue that studying hard in school is very important, even more than have a social communication, I do believe that the communication is more affect for having a successful job. There are many reason, two of which I will discuss here.
To being with, almost all of the job needs communication with consumers. If one cannot manage their morality when they face to a lot of people, he or she lose their occupation very soon. For elaborate my point I want to bring an adequate here, I have two friends who was working at a same company, one of them has a very strong ability to commute with others and one of them has not, but he had been very knowledgeable since he was a high school student. Nevertheless, he was not a social person, so despite the fact that he was very talented he is not a prosperous worker in that company, because consumer preferred talk with his coworker who has friendship and have a smile on their face. Therefore, I personally think that the hardworking at school has not a guarantee for success in the future, and it will more effective if one has a sociable relation with people as well.
Second, the worker must have a good relationship with many of their coworkers, because they will help them. For instance, when they go to the vacation or when has a problem they can ask them. My sister is in a ministry for doing some official work, so she tells me that in this department, almost everyone has a relationship in a good manner, so they have very supportive treat with each other, if one wants to have overcome an especial problem in the company, everybody comes with a rest of the mind, because they know they will solve it when they are with each other. In contrast, my brother work in a company with many talent employees, but he said they have a lot of problems at there, because everyone has a private problem that no body help others. As a result, I p
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Suggestion: many reasons
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...o of which I will discuss here. To being with, almost all of the job needs commu...
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Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'loses'.
Suggestion: loses
...they face to a lot of people, he or she lose their occupation very soon. For elabora...
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Suggestion: nobody
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, well, for instance, in contrast, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1792.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49122807018 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61137488182 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491228070175 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 579.6 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.7581238777 48.9658058833 194% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.0 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.14285714286 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189393871827 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0753206027418 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0776700295261 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152514762281 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0935218950044 0.0645574589148 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.06 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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