Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?
By and large, nobody has doubt that parents have an indispensable effect on the quality of our lives since we learn from them what is good or bad, what is the way of behavior or thinking. In addition, what is the purpose of our life? So nowadays parents have more convince of this influence, and more careful from their interaction with their children. A question that is debated in different circles in this case is what duty parents have when their children go to school. One outstanding viewpoint emphasizes that parents must give money to them for every good mark they get in school. I personally repudiate this idea. In the paragraphs below, two reasons will be investigated in support of this response.
The first reason coming to my mind this children habit to this and it is not match with real life. In fact, the real society is different from this attitude. In the society one person after a lot of effort with high education may be do not find an adequate job. So this person felt to dejection very soon. For instance, consider one civil engineer boy who is 24 years old. He ends his master degrees with high marks from Sharif University of Iran. Therefore, he seeks for a job position but not find any position without 3 years’ experience. He learns in his family from when he was childhood if he gets a good mark from school and if he goes to top field in engineering, he can achieve to a lot of money. He has not any interest or cognition before going to this field. So now, he is not any aim for continuing and became very sadness.
The final point which deserves some words here is that it causes children miss their valuable talent. It is very better if parents pay attention to assiduity, and show happiness for existence of child instead of his or her marks in school. If child has attempted for learning it is very important, without considering s/he can get good mark or not. For instance, consider one girl she is 7 years old and she loves karate. She plays karate all the time and cannot get a good mark from school, so if parents say to him if you get a good mark in school we give you money. She does not pay attention to karate a lot, because she cannot get a good mark in school without spending a lot of time and takes help from parents, but without any doubt if she can spend her time to playing karate she becomes expert karateka in future and everyone know him. In addition, she enjoys from the all of her time that she spends in karate and she reaches to goal of one life.
To put everything in a nutshell, all the aforementioned ideas and reasoning bring us to the conclusion that if parents give money to their child for every good mark s/he gets in school it is not very useful. This is owing to the fact real life is different from this also it causes child do not spend his or her time in tasks s/he interested on and has ability do it in the best way. Thus, we can sure about parents must look at to child ability then spend the finance for it.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, so, then, therefore, thus, for instance, in addition, in fact, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2441.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 558.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.37455197133 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86024933743 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36493759293 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453405017921 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 759.6 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.1864636188 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.4074074074 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.338661249783 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0951557284136 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0867817431708 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219810553003 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0488209344951 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.07 10.9000537634 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.92 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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