Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, there are many television channels discussing events around the world. There is a controversial topic among people, that whether it is important to learn about the events that do not affect our lives. I believe that it is not important to know these events. In the following paragraphs the most important reasons supporting my viewpoint are discussed.
First reason is that most of these events make us sad. Therefore, they increase the chance of depression. In other words, most of news are about war or food problems in some countries. Thus, listening to these news we feel more depressed, especially if we cannot help those people who suffer from war or lack of food. For example, my cousin listened to news every day and worried a lot about the people who lived in bad conditions. After a while, he became so depressed that he had to go see a psychologist and the doctor advised him to not watch bad news. Thus, knowing events in the other part of the world which do not affect our lives may depress us.
Second reason is that people do not have time to watch news of events around the world. That's because they dedicate most of their time to their work. Put differently, most people lead a hectic life and put most of their energy for their work. For instance, my dad works more than official hours, 10 hours every day. Therefore, when he comes home he is tired and does not have enough energy to follow the news. Hence, people tend to put their time and energy for their work rather than events in the other place of world.
Third reason is that we can try to solve problems around us and put our energy to help people who need help. In other words, there are a lot of people around us who need help and by helping them we can improve our environment. For instance, my uncle helps animals in his neighborhood by giving food to them and providing their living place. It is more valuable than worrying about events or problems which we cannot do anything about them.
So to sum it up, people do not have much time and prefer to dedicate it to their work and persona life instead of other places events. Moreover, knowing these events can increase chance of becoming depressed since most of these events are sad and depressing. Also helping people around us is more valuable than watching news in other place of world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 204, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this news' or 'these newses'?
Suggestion: this news; these newses
...s in some countries. Thus, listening to these news we feel more depressed, especially if w...
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Line 3, column 88, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
... watch news of events around the world. Thats because they dedicate most of their tim...
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Line 5, column 260, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...of these events are sad and depressing. Also helping people around us is more valuab...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, third, thus, while, for example, for instance, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1916.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5619047619 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3187787074 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.447619047619 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 592.2 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.7638849941 48.9658058833 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.8333333333 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.125 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176433614839 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0649263513726 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0526609734743 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124220773237 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0626186655653 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.87 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.62 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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