Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important for students to understand ideas and concepts than it is for them to learn facts.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Giving Financial incentives has been recognized as one of the most prevalent methods for motivating people to do their job in the best way possible. While some people believe that giving money in exchange for a good performance is not an acceptable approach, many believe that it can play a significant role in encouraging people. From my view of things, everybody should be given a gift in exchange for excellent performance. I have some reasons for my contention, two of which is listed below.
First of all, I am of the opinion that, probably nothing can be as likely to make a student motivated as money can do. The money has been known as the symbol of power and prosperity since it became necessary for trading. Accordingly, it is the best gift one can give to a diligent student. For example, when my father would give me money for my grades, I was going to improve my results in the next exams, and it has a remarkable effect on my education.
To continue, money has long been known as a symbol of power and prosperity. Nowadays, money is an indispensable part of our living and without it, nobody can live properly. Hence, I am of the opinion that if a child earns the money for its good job, he will believe in himself more. Furthermore, he would understand that one should work hard to achieve money, and it does not obtain easily. For example, the children, who take part-time jobs, spend their pocket money more wisely than the children who get money from their parents.
The last one but not the least one is that I believe that many children like to spend a part of their after-school time in doing leisure activities. I hold the view that some parents do not attach importance to their kids’ recreational demands. By giving them money, they would get the freedom of choice of taking part in their favorite activity. For instance, I loved playing football, and every money that I received was spent on the tools needed for the football. So, I was eager to study hard in order to be able to play football.
Given the reasons I just illustrated, I believe that money proves to be an applicable incentive due to the inspiration, self-confidence and freedom of choice that gives to children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eedom of choice that gives to children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, so, while, for example, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1830.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66836734694 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70398536602 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510204081633 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2763525982 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.3157894737 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6315789474 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21052631579 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139384516828 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0471114103019 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0305641312079 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.080104012479 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.031538454816 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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