Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays there are a few activities where people can spend their time, instead they prefer wasting in activities that they enjoy rather than they should. I believe that this is because people like doing things that seems interesting and they do not have to use hard work or their mind to think. They prefer easy things. In the following essay, I will explain why I think so.
First of all, with the new Era of internet and technology most people spend their time watching movies, playing video games and other using their phone. Consequently, people do not take their time to make the activities that they need or that they should. For example, my son is ten years old. He spends all the time playing games on his Xbox, that is why he loves and enjoys. However, when he has to do his homework he starts arguing with me because he does not like it. He should focus in what is really beneficial for him and for his futures opportunities.
Second, there are many women that spend all the time on Facebook, Instagram or buying articles online. They do not realize that they have responsibilities, so they should pay attention to the things that are important. Nevertheless, theses persons spend their time doing activities that are not healthy for them. They do not realize that at the end those things are bane and will not bring a benefit to them. For instance, I have a coworker that she always is buying clothes online. She never has money to pay their most important bills, so she is always figuring out how to deal with that. However, she has a credit card that she has to pay in full but she does not have the money to pay it.
In conclusion people have to think how to deal with the situation, because it is true that most do the individuals spend their time doing things that they enjoy rather than do that should do.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, nevertheless, really, second, so, as to, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1496.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 332.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.50602409639 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3380634855 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.469879518072 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 447.3 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0484274749 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.1111111111 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4444444444 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.38888888889 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.407618341535 0.236089414692 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136890365377 0.076458572812 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.146682479759 0.0737576698707 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.318857131804 0.150856017488 211% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.139330522067 0.0645574589148 216% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 58.1214874552 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.57 8.01818996416 82% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 86.8835125448 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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