It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject.
Having an abroad knowledge is a valuable attribute for a person. Better if that person knows about different subjects. It is really important being versatile in our life, instead of specializing in one particular area. As a result we can benefitted from that. I think this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First, many persons focus their entire life in learning and improving just one area of knowledge, without realize how important is being versatile in a person's life. Knowing about different areas give them the possibility to obtain better jobs and gain more money. For example, a person who have two different careers could improve their style of life and being successful in both. For instance, my brother is a translator. He studied language in The University of Chicago. He specialized in French, but at the same time he loves singing in French. As a result, last year he participated in a sing competition where he won the first place and the prize was a travel to French with everything include. As you can see he not only dedicated his life studying, but also, he took sing classes to enhance his performance during the competition.
Secondly, people should broaden their knowledge. They must always increase their expectations in life. Knowing only about one subject limit their possibilities of being successful in other areas of their life. For example, a person who have a broad knowledge would have more possibilities than a person that just only know a particular subject. I remember last year my company had to select a person to participate in the Dentist Annual Meeting in San Francisco. They choose the dentist who had broadest knowledge in dentistry. I was not selected because I was not able to complete my implantology mastery. As a result, I could not participate in the Annual Meeting.
Finally, is crucial that all persons do not just focus in a specific subject, but also learn from a variety of subjects because it would be of a great benefit for them
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...one particular area. As a result we can benefitted from that. I think this way for two rea...
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...is performance during the competition. Secondly, people should broaden their kn...
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... Francisco. They choose the dentist who had broadest knowledge in dentistry. I was not selec...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, i think, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1676.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87209302326 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.787085841 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549418604651 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.9928712656 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.1818181818 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6363636364 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.90909090909 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187591523356 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0461553842778 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0657992519459 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123275633249 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0451821630311 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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