Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the past few years, people spent more and more time on things for fun. And there are several signs to indicate this trend. many of them came from the development of technologies. As the technologies progress, there are much more distractions around us, compare with decades ago.
For example, with high performance of the processor within the smartphone, we can do a lot of things, which we can not imagine back then. Shopping on the phone was never easier than today. we can swipe and tap on the screen to shop almost everything you want in anywhere. You do not even have to get up from bed to order a dress from China. And this also cause a big problem. With this kind of convenience, people tend to count on their phone more and more. And just as the many analysis agree, most of the time people spent on their phone were not for work.
The popular of social network could also supports the idea of people spending too much time doing things for personal enjoyment. It is not hard to find that many people enjoy their second life on facebook. Hundreds of selfies, thousands of clips were being upload by a single account. And obviously, these situation are somewhat
social network instagram phone usage time
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, second, so, then, for example, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 43.0788530466 37% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1024.0 1977.66487455 52% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 221.0 407.700716846 54% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6334841629 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85565412703 4.48103885553 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37812833111 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 212.727598566 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.606334841629 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 315.9 618.680645161 51% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.2131568993 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 68.2666666667 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7333333333 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216229387534 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0601206185898 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0774517239602 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1175501677 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0709236603277 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.7 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.98 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 86.8835125448 47% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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