Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Before tendering my opinion I think it is better to take a quick glance at the arguments on both sides. The first attitude support the claim, because believes that the teacher inspire students. However, the second opinion probably suggests students spend more time with their friends, hence they are more influenced by them. I subscribe to a view that students are more influenced by their friends not their teachers, therefore I strongly disagree with the statement. This essay will explore these arguments.
First, I believe students spend most of their time with their friends, so it is highly possible to affected by them not their school teachers. They attend in the classroom for five or six hours a day alongside their friends. Some of them probably do not pay attention to the teachers word. Most of them look at the teacher while they are imagining other things in their minds, and other who pay attention to the teacher probably forget the instructors word soon or late.
Moreover, I think most of students influenced by social network websites such as Facebook, or Instagram. Thorough these websites they contact with their friends and hang out with them. Nowadays, we can observe that individuals, especially students, spend most of their daily time in the internet. They hang out in the cyberspace with their virtual friends, and in the real world also share their ideas with them. You know there is general rule about communication which says: the more time spend with people, the more you become look like them. In other words, persons are affected by their close friends and their intimate social ties. For instance, recently, I have read a paper which exactly illustrate this idea. The researchers conducted a experiment to find out which factor is the pivotal that inspire individuals. The results indicate that intimate friends are the vital factor among all the other ones.
Consequently, I guess students are more influenced by their friends, because they spend most of their time with them. Plus, some of them do not even pay attention to their classes and what their teachers say.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 336, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... of them look at the teacher while they are imagining other things in their minds, and other ...
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Line 6, column 20, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the students') or simply say ''most students''.
Suggestion: most of the students; most students
... soon or late. Moreover, I think most of students influenced by social network websites s...
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Line 6, column 745, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...te this idea. The researchers conducted a experiment to find out which factor is ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, hence, however, look, moreover, second, so, therefore, while, for instance, i guess, i think, such as, you know, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 351.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03418803419 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48352335356 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501424501425 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.576911224 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.35 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.55 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.7 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352276399047 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117921281771 0.076458572812 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100889466537 0.0737576698707 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263351681987 0.150856017488 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0498415394113 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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