Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.
It is an undeniable fact that the surrounding members of society inspire human being. Since the dawn of civilization, all people have been under the effect of their peers. In terms of whether teachers are more influential on the students or their friends; there are controversial opinions. However, in my perspective friends are the ones who have a paramount impact on the students, due to the fact that they are at the same age, also view the world from a similar angle.
In the first place, the essential factors in terms of psychologic influences should be regarded. It is crystal clear that the similar age of the students contribute them to have a somewhat analogous approach to diverse issues. A recent study which was conducted by sociologists revealed that the mediocre students' performance increased when they were besides élite students. For instance, if a student has difficulties in learning educational matters, they began to use their friends approach to tackle the problem. Using friends ideas not only makes the problem to be acceptable but also make it easier to solve since the student's friend has solved the same issue. On the other hand, students consider their teacher as the authoritative power that dictates the preordained rules. In such an environment, students tend to influenced by their friends.
Another exquisite reason which makes students the follower of their peer is the similarity of their world and unique look that they have towards the universe. Take the competition as an example: If one of the students could gain a medal in the country, all of his classmates would be encouraged to make the same success. Nevertheless, the triumph of the teacher could never provoke such an enthusiasm in the students. If parents look for their students’ progress, they should offer an environment in which all the talented and hardworking students have been gathered. being beside talented members would have a better result for the students in terms of educational progress.
To sum up, many students' peer action has been illustrated. Some factors help them to be more influential than the teacher. The most prominent ones are a similar age and a unique view of the phenomenons of the world. These factors lead to be under the influence of their friends. It is predicted that students who are surrounded by juvenile delinquents emulate their actions and more likely never meet a bright future, despite their inner abilities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 306, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...sociologists revealed that the mediocre students performance increased when they were be...
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Line 9, column 574, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Being
...ardworking students have been gathered. being beside talented members would have a be...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, look, nevertheless, so, thus, for instance, to sum up, in the first place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2071.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12623762376 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81516942723 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517326732673 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 630.0 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.6744017101 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.619047619 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2380952381 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29189799672 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0995569299152 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0918227646046 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195361606034 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0448808397582 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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