Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
How do people become successful? Many people believe that successful people repeatedly do the things they know well. On the other hand few believe that doing new things and taking up risks will make one to be successful. In my opinion what it takes for someone to become is successful is the ability to take up risks and then try new things for several reasons.
To begin with people who try new things tend to improve their knowledge which will be of great help for them in the long run. When people keep try new things they are also learning about new things so their knowledge expands. This new knowledge can be used in their area they know well to produce to great results. For instance there is an electrical engineer who is an expert in the electrical parts, acquires on mechanical engineering he can build innovative products like electric cars which require knowledge on both areas. Likewise, many great scientists keep doing new things by doing interdisciplinary work by collaborating with other scientists.
Furthermore, generally it takes a long time for someone to become successful when they confine themselves to their only area of expertise. When one tries to work on new things and venture into unexplored areas, there is a huge amount of uncertainty, higher chance of failure. But taking these risks helps in reaching ones goal faster. Many successful people have taken unconventional risk paths and reached their goals. One such example is mark Zuckerberg they founder of facebook, he has taken up a huge risk by dropping out of college in order to build facebook. Today he became a highly successful person at a very young age. Very very few get to that level of achievement at that age.
In Conclusion, although people believe that successful people are those who repeated do well at what they are already doing well. I believe it is important that one should take up new things and risks so they widen their knowledge and in turn their chance to succeed.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, likewise, so, then, well, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1647.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 340.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84411764706 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6277909862 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497058823529 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 509.4 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.5547014172 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8888888889 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350973140262 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131180201694 0.076458572812 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100103078572 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.248758723453 0.150856017488 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0953184634701 0.0645574589148 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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