Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Work is an important part of our lives. We spend most of our time at work and make money from our jobs, so we should think about the ways of success. Some people believe that successful people always do things that they know how to do properly. In my view, success comes from innovation and doing new things for two reasons.
First, people learn more by doing new things. As you can imagine, when one does the same things for a while, he will not learn anymore because he understands everything. On the other hand, when people try new thing, although there are a lot of risks of failure, they will have more challenges and learn new things through that. For example, when I was in university, I studied electrical engineering, but I was interested in different subjects like physics and chemistry as well. Therefore, I took some courses in those areas, including the electromagnetics class which was very tough for me since I have limited basic information about that course. I was spending a lot more time than normal During the semester and learned related material, which helped me a lot to understand the concept of electromagnetic better. While I was doing my final thesis in last year, I used what I had learned from electromagnetics because my thesis had many in common with that subject. I think, If I had not taken that class, I would not have been able to do my thesis easily.
Second, people will receive more experience by doing new things in their lives. When one try something new, regardless of success and failure, he gets new experiences which can help him in the future. For instance, After graduation, I started my company in my major, though I had not enough experience to do that, I take a huge risk and opened my company. Unfortunately, I did not succeed with that job and I was forced to close my business after only one year. However, that job taught me many valuable tips about business; I got many experiences about managing employees, advertising, and trade. A couple of years Later, I retired to open my business and since I was experienced, I could get along with. I think, If I had not taken the risk, I would not have my business now.
In sum, people who take risks and experience new things will become a success. Not only, do they learn more knowledge, but they also get more experience than those that do the same thing.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 189, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ence than those that do the same thing.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, well, while, as for, for example, for instance, i think, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1945.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61995249406 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65966864807 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510688836105 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 3.51792114695 313% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5042854694 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.619047619 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0476190476 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275860167555 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0958244538928 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0943984152857 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203620108202 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0600790411853 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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