Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Friends are very important in everyone's life. You spend a lot of time in your life with them in many stages of your life. in school, college, work and etc you are always in connection with many of them. Some believe it is important to maintain friendship with small number of people in a long time, while others think it's important to be able to make new friendships easily. I think althugh the first view is true to some degrees the second view is more important.
First and foremost, you will always face new situations in your life, whether you like it or not. You cannot stay in the same place and do the same activities throghout your life, and this forces you to meet new people. So it is essential to have the ability to communicate with them and make new friendships. For instance, I used to go to a school in my childhood near our home where i had a lot of friends there, but when our family moved to another city, in Hamedan, I couldn't be in contact with like before, so I had to communicate with new people. At first weeks that I went to school there, it was terrible for me. I couldn't talk or play with anyone. But after several week, I started to find new friends that helped me a lot. We played together, went outside in our leisure time and helped each other in lessons and every thing started to be great again. The same expierince happened for me when I went to study for college in Tehran, and I'm sure will happen again. So it's crucial for us to make new friendships in new situations.
Second, making new friendships enable you to experience new thing that you haven't before, and this adds diversity in your life and makes it more enjoyable. For example, when I went to college I got familiar with groups of people that went to mountain climbing every weekend. I hadn't experienced this before that and they invited me to join their group and go to the mountains with them, and I happily agreed. The first time that I went with was a great expierince. When we reached the top I could see the whole city and the weather was so clean, and the enviroment was so beautiful that I didn't want to leave. I decided to go with them every weekend and this has made me much happier and also stronger, since it is a great exercise too.
So generally speaking, making new friendships can ease our life a lot and is very essential. In the end I want to indicate that first kind of view is also true, althogh the second is more important. So it's better to keep your old friendships, if possible, as well as making new friendships.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, kind of, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2069.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 474.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.36497890295 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43147189625 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464135021097 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 641.7 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1748223602 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.2083333333 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296040212655 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0878907400677 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0714490064538 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184399229539 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0808333328188 0.0645574589148 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.01 10.9000537634 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.91 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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