Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the contemporary world, people are busy in their education and work which make them move away from family. There is a long standing debate on the importance of staying as an extended family, on which, some people argue that the importance has not faded away from the past. However, some may not support this opinion. I , strongly believe the fact that extended family is less valued these days than the past which I will explain in the ensuing paragraphs.
Living in the joint family system with the grand parents, cousins, aunts and uncles had been the system of the past. This inculcated a healthy lifestyle with each relationship acted as a support system in every aspect. Weighing the pros and cons of such system, people nowadays prefer nuclear family over the joint family system. The varied interests and choices in pursuing education and career demands people to move away from the home town to big cities.For instance, when I was small, my family moved apart from our extended family in search of a good job for my father in a big city. This also provided a plenty of opportunity to me and my sister to learn some extra curricular activities as well. We would not have received such facilities by staying with the extended family in the village. Many families like us prefer the nuclear family setup because of this.Moreover, staying with the extended family may cause conflicts among the family members while taking important decisions. This may further create a rage among the family members. People who have more pressure at their workplace, prefer to avoid such conflicts at home and they like to be more independent.
The growing cost of living makes it even more difficult to adjust among many members of the extended family set up. This urges the people to move away and provide the maximum comfort among the small family set up. The children also get pampered easily by their grand parents and uncles because of which many parents prefer to stay away from the joint family system.According to the research conducted by the sociology department of university of Utah,above 80 percent of the people expressed their desire to stay in nuclear set up because of the economical, personal reasons predominantly. However they expressed their desire to visit their extended family only on special occasions.
Admittedly, the extended family set up provided lot of support and benefits in the past. This enabled the family members to take care of their ancestral properties and business. Moreover, the kids learnt the moral values and discipline from the elders.
To sum up, due to the aforementioned reasons, I affirm that the extended family set up has slowly reduced its importance these days than in the past because of financial and psychological reasons.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, moreover, so, well, while, apart from, for instance, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2313.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97419354839 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5905056423 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494623655914 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 739.8 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.9101892167 48.9658058833 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.142857143 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1428571429 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09523809524 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192343336832 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0649961981344 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503884201931 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114498200893 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0297716246434 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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