Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Website.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Looking at the present day scenario, there are lot of controversial debates over parenting habits. I strongly support the notion that educating children has become more tough these days than in the past. I would like to substantiate my opinion in the following essay.
First and foremost, the growing technology and introduction of gadgets at a very early age had created a significant impact on the children. These days, children often spend time on cell phones, online games or social networking website as they find lot of amusement only in these social gadgets and media. This not only affects their time and concentration but also affect their physical and mental health. A recent survey in Harvard university on primary school children reported that the level of exposure of cell phones or video games directly affected the educational performance of the children which reflected on their exams and ultimately those students with more exposure obtained very low grades.
Secondly, the kids too strongly pressurize their parents to purchase their favorite video games. For example, my nephew who is fourth grade wanted to have a video game after his friends in school bullied him for not knowing the game. Finally when he got one for himself, he spent all his productive timing in playing that game and lost his grades. These social media and gadgets draw their attention completely by draining their energy, diverting their focus away from learning and reading books. Moreover, these electronic products keep the children's expectations high and always expect them to have new things and make them live in fantasy.
I would like to conclude by saying that the cell phones and social media had altogether challenged the parenting habits and made it tougher as they physically and mentally drain the energy of the children. They diverts their concentration away from their studies and affect their performance.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Finally,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 15.1003584229 13% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1609.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 310.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19032258065 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59317321954 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.616129032258 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.3754640726 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.928571429 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1428571429 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153384330868 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0526735006007 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.057608433624 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0988447310106 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492836181873 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.41 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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