In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
Saving money is the most essential quality to be acquired in life. When it comes to pass the financial responsibility to kids, some may feel it is wise to inculcate such quality from a very young age. While some others may argue that it can be taught later on once they reach adulthood. I, however believe in the first notion which I will explain in the following essay.
Money nowadays determine the social status of human being. It is not only essential to earn money in all possible ways but also to save it wisely. This quality should be encouraged from a very young age by teaching the importance of spending it wisely. Parents should educate their children about how difficult it was for them to earn that amount, how to spend it usefully, and how to save it. This allotment of budget taught in the very young age will certainly motivate the kids about financial management.For example, my mother calculate our monthly budget of our family in front of all our family members. Since childhood, me and my siblings had grown seeing this every month. This helps ous even now to effectively utilise our monthly salary. However, if my parents had given money whenever we demanded might have spoiled us disregarding the value of the treasure.
Childhood is the age where things taught remain fresh and clear in mind. So it is of utmost importance to develop this quality. The piggy bank savings and the effective utilization of that amount to buy their things of interest will enable them to save money for their needs. Children of parents who pamper them whenever they demand are easily spoiled and may invite unwanted issues later on. They may fail to even save money for their needs.For instance, a friend of mine, Rachel spent a lot of money with her friends during our high school. They befriended her only for that money, because of which she developed lot of bad habits and finally she failed in her exams.
To conclude, I would like to emphasize that money management should be taught from childhood to sow the thought of financial responsibility. This quality acquired from childhood make them systematic, well planned and disciplined individual.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, regarding, so, well, while, as for, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1793.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83288409704 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53026952326 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5525606469 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6006313081 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.65 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.55 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.3 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186542649576 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0514570131458 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0475883446878 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110243642296 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0132901345142 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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