People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
In this contemporary world, due to globalisation and revolution in industrial and corporate field people travel across the globe. The modern era of comfortable and sophisticated transportation has brought the opposite poles closer to each other. There is a long standing debate among people as to whether travelling in their own country is beneficial or to travel to foreign countries. In my opinion setting the boundaries may not help which I will explain in the ensuing paragraphs.
First and foremost, the exorbitant growth of corporate sector in the globalised world demands people to travel all across the world. When some one set their limit within their country, they cannot outgrow in their field. Travelling to a foreign country however helps the business or corporate people to widen their business and imbibe the practice and technology of other countries. Moreover, certain companies encourage their employees to attend apprentice programs in other countries to enhance their skills. When someone is bound to their home country, they may loose this opportunity of learning different things. For instance, my friend Lawrence was once invited for a faculty training program in Korea. As he rejected the program because of the fear of travelling abroad, he lost the promotion he had to receive that year and it was offered to another person who attended that program.
Moreover, travelling to different countries give plethora of opportunities to learn about their education system, life style, technology and culture. This broaden our horizon about the humanity and various practices. Living within the comfort zone prevents such learning experiences and put our life style and experience in a bird’s cage. There are plenty of students who travel abroad for higher studies. There are numerous student exchange programs in the university level which enable them to learn various things and get exposure from the other universities. Later on ,when they pursue a career , this will improve their credentials and confidence to secure an excellent job. This also enable them to sustain the competitive world.
To conclude, I affirm that due to the aforementioned reasons, travelling to foreign countries benefit people by providing them lot of exposure about various fields. The advantages of learning higher education and procuring a job are the other compelling benefits of travelling across the globe.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, as to, for instance, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2047.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41534391534 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82644502884 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560846560847 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 630.0 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.075797863 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.35 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339864907132 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0934761234039 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106829437593 0.0737576698707 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212038458466 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0563069513045 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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