Do you agree or disagree? People can solve important problems by themselves or by their families; thus, it is almost not necessary to refer to the government.
Throughout history, problem-solving always has been a crucial factor in mankind’s life. The controversial question which arises here is whether solving people’s problems by themselves or by their families is enough, thus, it is not obligatory to call attention to the government. As far as I am concerned, although some personal problems could be solved by people, there are some problems that require to government’s involvement. I will elaborate my reasons in the following paragraphs.
First of all, one should take into account that in today’s complicated modern lifestyle, a government has a specific definition: a system of people who have the authority to control a country by law, resources and knowledge. In every community, some problems are found that people cannot figure it out by on their own. For example, imagine the public transportation system in a town needs to be improved: some streets require monitoring facilities such as traffic lights, traffic signs, public transportation vehicles are deteriorating, and must be replaced. People understand the problem, even they might have the solution, but they cannot take an action for several reasons: they do not know which signs are supposed to be there, how much it would cost to repair the vehicles, and are they are capable of affording that costs? . Here comes the government involvement. By the authority, capital and law, resovles the problems that definitely people could not solve will be resolved.
The second reason I would like to mention is that governments not only are in charge of controlling a society, but they also are responsible to consider everyone’s benefits in a community. Society members might recommend a solution which only will meet the problem of a group in the country, and will cause difficulties for others. The government must take everyone’s benefits and interests into account, and come up with a solution which solves the problem, and covers all groups’ interests as well. As an example, I can mention a situation which happened in China in 2010. The business owners increased the minimum wage for their male workers by about 10% per hour; wonenwomen protested and did not show up at their jobs for a week. The government convoked the cabinet, and legislated a law by which, business owners could pay their taxes in several occasions, so they were able to pay their female employees as much as they paid to their male ones. After that, women got back to their jobs and the problems were solved by considering the interests of both parties.
To sum up, I really believe that people can solve their personal important problems by themselves, but for some major problems, they have to refer to the government and let it to figure out the solution because the government has the ability, resources, and law to solve problems, and it is its responsibility to think of everyone’s interests to do so.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, so, thus, well, for example, such as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2461.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13778705637 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0771834784 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51356993737 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 762.3 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 11.0 1.86738351254 589% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.6749569528 48.9658058833 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.722222222 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6111111111 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216676533253 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0713324099503 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0665610465121 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154108529886 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492145031146 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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