Do you agree or disagree? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.
Nowadays children spend most of their time playing computer games. Some parents don’t have any problem with this issue and let their children free to stare at their laptop or tablet. but I think these parents are wrong. In what follows I offer two reasons in favor of my opinion.
First of all, childhood is a time suitable for cultivating different skills, including social and physical skills. Because children are capable of expanding themselves in several directions. they are not limited by anything outside themselves. they can actualize different skills which are latent in them. but by playing computer games, they become oblivious to their ability. In other words, children by immersing themselves in electronic games, lose their attention on themselves. I have read last week a report in the New York times indicated that according to much recent research, children who spend most of their time gaming will not be skillful enough later on.
Another reason which I can mention is that the only epoch in one’s life in which mind is fresh and can absorb novel materials easily is childhood. In other words, children’s mind is ripe for learning. Therefore, if children did not study when their mind is still fresh, they would not be able to do that in their adulthood. now, by playing electronic games they lose this unrepeatable epoch which can be fulfilled with learning. For example, I remember that my brother had the capability of learning new languages when he was 3. but he filled his time playing FIFA online. now he can speak only in his native language although he could have spoken at least two or three languages.
Let us wrap the whole thing up. playing computer games in childhood, in an obsessive way, has countless disadvantages; two of them can be put as follows: by gaming, children cannot build up their potential skills and also lose the only available time in life for studying and learning.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, still, therefore, at least, for example, i think, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1618.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 325.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97846153846 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63344713009 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.581538461538 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.9466476748 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.9 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.25 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229655380339 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0701422203534 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0785570403076 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153229376058 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0304578862085 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.002688172 45% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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