Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
All university students should be required to take history courses no matter what their field of study is.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is a debate on whether or not students should take history courses regardless of their major. Some people argue that making history courses mandatory has many negative influences. For example, some students may not be interested in history so they don’t attend the class or don’t take it seriously. Yet such a perception, in my opinion, is inaccurate. In what follows I offer two reasons in favor of my opinion.
To commence, history broadens our horizons. By knowing what happens in the past, students could acquire a better vision of the future. Besides, by studying history their understanding of the socio-economic situation in which they live, will deepen. For instance, when I was 16, I took a course about the modern history of Japan. In this course, for the first time, I faced the process of industrialization in a country which changed my view about modernization. I realized that In order to become a developed country, one should open the door, come out of his shell and collaborate with other developed countries.
Another reason which I can mention is that by studying history, students recognize their national task. In other words, they realize that they have a responsibility toward their predecessors. They should actualize their hopes and dreams. This recognition makes them motivated because they feel the pressure of history on their shoulder. Indeed, they will try harder and put all of their energy into their work. For example, my father told me, when he was young, he started reading the major events which have shaped our history. He said the more he immersed himself in those events the more he became resolute to continue the unfinished path of the people who wrote the history with their efforts.
Let us wrap the whole thing up. Taking history should be obligatory for all of the students because it helps them deepen their view and also motivates them to become more determined in the major they pursue.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
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...Taking history should be obligatory for all of the students because it helps them deepen t...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...re determined in the major they pursue.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, may, so, for example, for instance, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1630.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72333907337 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.570552147239 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.7207754204 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.5 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221846929177 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0692795991102 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051605523595 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144396148999 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0329026197565 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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