Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
Nowadays, the influences of celebrities have gotten lucid for everyone, persons who have a good reputation among people of a country. Regard this fact, there is a controversial question asking, these men require more privacy than now. I agree with the opinion which is expressing the lack of freedom in behavior for these humans. The reasons to substantiate my idea is explored in the following.
First of all, like all men and women during the world actors and actresses or a person who is famous needs to have time for himself. To put on the other hand, some kinds of acts like taking a photo or trying to speak with these types of people compel them to quit the places which are proper for being comfortable. As an illustration, I am going to speak about one of the popular soccer players whose name is Ali Daei. Daei had been playing for several until he had a problem in his leg. One upon a time when he was invited to a program on television, he told, I could not go anywhere, always people wanted to speak with me and have a picture with me. Daie had suffered these difficulties because he needed more privacy which did not exist at that time.
Second, famed guys have their family and disturbing their peace has negative effects on that man or woman. To be specific, one of the most major parts of privacy includes the family and destroying the personal aspect of popular entertainer's lives is harmful to the mental condition of the guy. A personal experience of mine can drive this fact home, everyone in our town have known my uncle for almost 4 years, because he has a talk show every night, but his family face many difficulties because they cannot see their father also they lose parties and gathering, It is not just for them my uncle does not like this situation too; therefore, both families and my uncle is encountering the issue. If people had let him have a private life, his household would not bear these hard events.
By and large, I do believe famous people need more privacy. Since they need to have a comfortable time in their lives also they need to spend a lot of time with their household which makes them happier and powerful.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, by and large, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1773.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55784061697 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44359584327 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580976863753 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.9596168541 48.9658058833 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.8125 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3125 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.625 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226523601667 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0693723234734 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0559786724393 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144253778704 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0382807115889 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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