In future students may have the choice of studying at home by using technology such as computers or television or of studying traditional schools Which would you prefer Use reasons and specific details to explain your choice

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In future students may have the choice of studying at home by using technology such as computers or television or of studying traditional schools. Which would you prefer? Use reasons and specific details to explain your choice.

With the advancing of technology many things such as education will change. Such advancement in technology will make some people stay home and studying alone by using computer, television and so on. This improvement will not cause some other people to leave traditional form of studying at school. I prefer the old format of studying. In my opinion, student at school can gain knowledge easily, have more motivation to gain new knowledge, and also have a good social relationship.
Attending students in school will make easy to them in realizing new topics. Teachers can easily give them the information that they need to understand topics. While in the home-base school they need to find topics by searching in the internet or using DVDs. Additionally, students can find their questions comfortably by asking them from teachers or other classmates.
Teachers at school will give practical information which motivate student and satisfy their brain in creations for future jobs. Moreover, participating student in the experimental-base classes will speed up the learning process. For example, an individual can learn a math subject with using computer, but for the case of learning ways to disassemble a specific device, attending in workshop is necessary. Students also are energetic people, hence with helping them in exercises they will enjoy learning many things.
Finally, schools are some kind of social places and participating them in social activity will be beneficial for their future life which they need to be socialized. In schools, teachers have many activities that encourage children to speak and to have a discussion with classmates. These actions will have positive affect on their behavior. For instance, teacher may give them a class assignment and they must discuss and exchange their knowledge with each other. Consequently, these exercises will enrich student socialization.
To sum up, technology have made many things easier and more affordable, but traditional studying have many benefits that do not obtain with computer or TV.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 315, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'consequently', 'finally', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'while', 'for example', 'for instance', 'kind of', 'such as', 'in my opinion', 'to sum up']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.248603351955 0.229887763892 108% => OK
Verbs: 0.175977653631 0.158761421928 111% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0893854748603 0.0866891130778 103% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0391061452514 0.046263068375 85% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0502793296089 0.0685040099705 73% => OK
Prepositions: 0.111731843575 0.118717715034 94% => OK
Participles: 0.0530726256983 0.0351676179071 151% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.9007123636 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0279329608939 0.0309702414327 90% => OK
Particles: 0.00558659217877 0.00188951952338 296% => OK
Determiners: 0.0586592178771 0.0887237588012 66% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0446927374302 0.0209618222197 213% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.0111731843575 0.0139019557991 80% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2058.0 2387.08602151 86% => OK
No of words: 323.0 408.028673835 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.37151702786 5.86048508987 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.48200974243 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.390092879257 0.338922669872 115% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.315789473684 0.251872472559 125% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.25386996904 0.174417080927 146% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.167182662539 0.112833075102 148% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9007123636 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541795665635 0.524397521467 103% => OK
Word variations: 57.3077420153 59.2087087015 97% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6684587814 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.5533526081 83% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.280913841 48.84282405 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.315789474 120.699889404 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.5533526081 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.842105263158 0.644075263715 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 48.5789473684 45.7405998639 106% => OK
Elegance: 1.55789473684 1.45489161554 107% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319221990937 0.300154397459 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.109675476789 0.103427244359 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0683269350447 0.0752933317313 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.494329849324 0.497263757937 99% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.153238719766 0.151897553556 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109555111673 0.114077575197 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0648767723726 0.0781384742642 83% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.235572051775 0.336927656856 70% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0529459177456 0.067059652881 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188284062031 0.210909579961 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0684239139723 0.0618886996521 111% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.91756272401 142% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.75985663082 217% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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