If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
The hometown that I grew up in is Kolkata, India. The city is beautifully set p by the river Ganges. It is the amalgamation point of various cultures and traditions. It is also known as the city of Joy for the various festivals it likes to celebrate. But the biggest problem that my city is facing is air pollution and I would like to decrease the air pollution of the city by changing the transport system in the city.
The public transport system of Kolkata mainly consists of public buses, cabs and private cars. These public buses and cabs flout rules regarding the use of new engines and contribute to the pollution. I would like to form a committee who will be responsible for checking and hence, if responsible, charging a fine for flouting the rules. I would also like to decrease the number of cabs and increase the number of buses so that less number of vehicles is present on the street.
Also, another way to decrease the number of private cars is improve condition and the number of routes of the subway. The subway, present in Kolkata is quite popular among the masses but the problem is it is only circumscribed in certain routes and areas of Kolkata. Also, the condition of subway needs to be improved to give a better service to the public. Also, I would like to implement a ban on hand driven rickshaws as it is parochial and belongs to the medieval ages. With the advent of new technologies, I am sure small electric cars play a huge role in the transport system and hece, air pollution can be decreased.
The air pollution in Kolkata is beyond the threshold level and is causing lots of lung diseases, asthma problems and even lung cancers. Hence, I would like an overhaul of the transport system to decrease the pollution level.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 61, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'improved'.
Suggestion: improved
... decrease the number of private cars is improve condition and the number of routes of t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, regarding, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1447.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 314.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60828025478 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59668217672 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477707006369 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 457.2 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.1518469465 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.4375 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.625 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.1875 5.45110844103 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.046106068599 0.236089414692 20% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0156875333121 0.076458572812 21% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0202816932605 0.0737576698707 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0292599649703 0.150856017488 19% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0169402665448 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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