If you could study a subject that you have never had the opportunity to study. What would you choose? Explain your choice, using specific reasons and details.
Everyone in one’s life prefers doing something which has either never done before or not had opportunities to do this. Also, providing a condition for people to choose a subject for studying, they strive to learn something is very more intriguing them. Therefore, If I had a chance for studying a subject, I would choose medical subject. Since I wish I had learned medicine subject and were very interested it in my college, but I chose another subject for my future life. I will explain my reasons for this choice hereunder.
First and foremost, throughout the world, more people are suffering from poverty condition where is deprived of suitable facilities such as education, recreational, and curing. When learning a medical subject for being a sophisticated doctor, I can travel some region for visiting sick people all around the world to treat them. Therefore, I think that more professional doctors in the world lead to lesser patients suffering from a dangerous disease. As statistically in Asian countries, more doctors in a country can restrict the increasing rate of illnesses than other countries have fewer doctors to rescue humans’ body from fatality. As a result, doctors have a significant role in having healthy communities many years.
Secondly, nowadays, every realm of sciences has some weakness of improvements, hence people must strive to expand the edge of science to reach the zenith of state-of-the-art technologies. I am feeling in the medical science has some shortage of developments and needs more investigation for detecting the best way for treating, then learning medical science allows me to clarify any dark spot in medical science to achieve a breakthrough in this field. For example, many lethal diseases have not sufficient ways to cure people, and many people are dying from the shortage of drugs or correct surgical operations. My goal is exploring the edge of medical science that people conveniently are treated without any pain and deep wounds.
All in all, I think medical science is the best subject for studying because not only I help the people live in poverty all around the world, but also I can figure out a way for curing people suffered fatal diseases without feeling any pain. I think that what thing is more momentous than studying about medical science, I cannot find another thing, do you approve my idea?
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, another thing, for example, i think, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1987.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09487179487 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84778077778 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548717948718 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.8417458275 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.1875 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.375 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8125 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119721384314 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0473053225191 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0559107752572 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0742943929313 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0587238563605 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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