information
There are many people who think that access to too much information creates problems, which might seem true in that actually there have been lots of fake news. However, I think the internet provides people with a lot of valuable information in that if people build their ability to focus on valuable information and also because it makes it harder to control streams of information by a few number of people.
First of all, it is true that there are a lot of invaluable information on the internet which might lead people to choose something wrong, such as believing that vaccinating kids might cause them to have autism. However, as you see on the internet, you can also find that there are always counterparting information. Regarding anti-vaccinating situation, there are tons of more valuable information about why it is ok to vaccinate. However, a real reason that causes problem here is people's ability to choose correct and valid information, which is why I think it is true that problems from a lot of information comes from people inability to judge information they find online.
Secondly, information on the internet is valuable in that it cannot hide what they want to show to people. Internet has no filter and it exposes everything that someone writes or posts online, which makes it harder to be autocratic or violate rules. For example, in the past, when internet wasn't available, when there were violence against it citizen in South Korea, people couldn't have access to those information, which made it harder to resist dictatorship. However, these days, people can read and see what is truly happening around them, which makes it harder for an autocratic leader or a few number of people control the information that people can reach, which is why South Korea had impeachment against the former president Park after seeing her misconstrue, because people twitted, write or post online about what they see and hear, which was impossible to control by the president.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that the internet provides us with a lot of valuable information while not all the information is valuable for the reasons I have mentioned above. All in all, with people's ability to judge information, and if there aren't any way to control information online, the internet will provide us benefits with its valuable information.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 389, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun number seems to be countable; consider using: 'few numbers'.
Suggestion: few numbers
... to control streams of information by a few number of people. First of all, it is true t...
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Line 2, column 511, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to correct'
Suggestion: to correct
...oblem here is peoples ability to choose correct and valid information, which is why I t...
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Line 3, column 291, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
...For example, in the past, when internet wasnt available, when there were violence aga...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 375, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...ainst it citizen in South Korea, people couldnt have access to those information, which...
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Line 3, column 398, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'those informations'?
Suggestion: this information; those informations
...th Korea, people couldnt have access to those information, which made it harder to resist dictato...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 596, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun number seems to be countable; consider using: 'few numbers'.
Suggestion: few numbers
...it harder for an autocratic leader or a few number of people control the information that ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 249, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: aren't
...lity to judge information, and if there arent any way to control information online, ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1959.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01023017903 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78282965122 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.470588235294 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 619.2 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.087003794 48.9658058833 176% => OK
Chars per sentence: 163.25 100.406767564 163% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.5833333333 20.6045352989 158% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.1666666667 5.45110844103 223% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312238214138 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156418825347 0.076458572812 205% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118307262228 0.0737576698707 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246402677528 0.150856017488 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0931211169559 0.0645574589148 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 11.7677419355 157% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.37 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 10.002688172 195% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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