It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ jobs. Agree or disagree?
Parents can play an important role in children life. Some groups of people hold the idea that children should not engage in their parents career. Other group may consider the opposite view. In my opinion, not only it is better for children to continue their parents job but also it can help them to be more successful in their life. I shall elaborate on my reaons in the following paragraphs.
Parents can be a graet help for children. They have stronger emotional bands with their children and will be there whenever they are in need or facing problems. Besides, when we make some costly mistake they treat us more gently. They want us to be a successful person in society and achieve our goals. My condition can be applied here as an example. I have worked for my father over five years. Whenever I make mistakes in the job, he offers some beneficial advice to improve my skills. We always talk with each other about how we can develop our career and gain more popularity in our field. We create a fantastic team togather, which not only help us to have a prosperous career but also help us to have a better relationship with each other.
Moreover, children by picking their parents career as their main job, can speed up their progress towards success. When an individual want to start his own job, he must work hard and gather a lot of experience. In addition he has to attract many loyal clients and raise his campany reputation in order to progress in his field. However, when you join your parents career, you can use their reputation as your own. You can help your parents to improve their career. For example, my uncle had a company with many loyal customers and clients. When his boy gratuate from university, he could work in his father’s company without any working background. And now, he make a lot of money by his own and help his father to run the company smoothly.
Finally, by joining parents job, an individual can improve his relationship with his parents. Having the same goal in a group can increase the interaction among the members. In this trend, they must have more consistence communication with each other in order to reach the final destination. This fact can be applied to the family business either. When family members are going to the specific target, which is making money as much as possible, they will forget the conflicts and have a better collaboration.
In conclusion, continuing the parents job has many advantages. Not only they can be a great mentor for person, but also you can achieve a prepared businuss with spending much energy and effords.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...hard and gather a lot of experience. In addition he has to attract many loyal clients an...
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'makes'.
Suggestion: makes
...out any working background. And now, he make a lot of money by his own and help his ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, however, if, may, moreover, so, as to, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2144.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71208791209 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53819417269 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481318681319 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 659.7 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.3620645104 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.9310344828 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6896551724 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.20689655172 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213005130288 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0661997460891 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0836212747826 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138059640643 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0708181459765 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.74 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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