It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
There is no doubt that nowadays, any events happening in the world play a crucial role in people’s lives. No one can deny the influence of phenomena in the world in daily lives. A controversial question arises about this issue why people must know about this? Some people have this idea that knowing about any events in the world are more useful; however, others believe that the people can overlook about this events, I subscribe the first idea and will explain about with my reasons hereunder.
First, in the contemporary, by improving technology and knowledge of humankind about consuming fuel, the environment might be more endangered with using all of the resources from the earth dramatically. By doing so, everyone can know about this issue, which does not arise problem for people who are easily ignoring the massive and huge issue. With this regard, every people are trying to acquire any information, and with this data is informed to another people living in the world can do an impressive work as a manager for the earth. With this cooperation, when people being more unified, every problem in the large magnitude can be solved only by collaborating each other to get a clean earth as soon as. As a result, knowing about any world changing can improve and provide a permanent life in every era of humanity
Another reason, every phenomenon can affect events which the people are thinking no relation in between them. For example, the price of oil in the world is affected by the lot of factors such characteristic of oil, politics, and even wars. Every people in the world think no relation between the price of oil; however, knowing about that is helped people how they are confronting with the changing price of oil in the world and even what phenomenon can change the cost of tools. In order to, every technology and industry is affected by price-changing of oil, and their products price are altered with this effects. Therefore, acquiring any information and data can help people to predict any alteration in their work. With a decent data-bank for any investment, can pave the way for prosperous.
All in all, knowing about phenomena not only help people to how managing any changing in the world, but also they can be more unified as a consistent group to acquire a clean environment in the near future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, so, therefore, for example, no doubt, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1932.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84210526316 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61816847976 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483709273183 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 620.1 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.2746211006 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.8 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73333333333 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195944027578 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0775366313289 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0580257092308 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13294905702 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0502940170805 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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