Many people visit museums when they travel to new places.Why do you think people visit museums? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Since the beginning of Industrial revelation, museums played a vital role in each civilized society. Some people like to visit them, however others takes radically different viewpoint and think they are not significant as it thought. From my vantage point, I am with former group and the lines will shed light on my standpoint.
First of all, visiting museums when people visit to new country is to individual's advantage because it increase knowledge about the culture of countries. There had been billion people lived in the world since the ancient time. All of them had different tradition, the way of life. It is good to learn them when you are in a trip. They wide our horizon and change our thought about the world.
Secondly, in approaching this matter, apart from what mentioned above, there are another subtle point which comes to my mind. I am not a person who like sun, beach and sea. Museums are best places to have enjoyable time. I visited Louvre museum in Paris three years ago. I met a group of students who like to art history. We shared our knowledges. I can forget my paris trip.
To wrap it up, taking all aforementioned reasons into the account, one can conclude that museums are significant for all country. Everybody should respect the importance of museums since they tell the history of us and came together us.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, secondly, so, apart from, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1113.0 1977.66487455 56% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 232.0 407.700716846 57% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7974137931 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90276135726 4.48103885553 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52743198829 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.646551724138 0.524837075471 123% => OK
syllable_count: 345.6 618.680645161 56% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.0024398137 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 65.4705882353 100.406767564 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.6470588235 20.6045352989 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88235294118 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241120644528 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0640622190412 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0760895047147 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134441287986 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518945168136 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 11.7677419355 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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