In order to attract more tourists, the government could either improve safety by hiring more police or improve its appearance by repairing old buildings and streets. Which way do you think is more effective?
Without a shadow of a doubt, the country's appearance is a decisive factor for foreign people to become encouraged to visit that land or not. As it is evident, the government plays a pivotal role in augmenting the number of tourists by taking action toward improving old sections of the country. Despite arguments asserting that the provision of a more secure atmosphere by hiring a host of policies can be more beneficial, I believe otherwise, maintaining that endeavors for renewing buildings and streets are a more efficient approach. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will explain these ideas through two compelling reasons.
First and foremost, the crux of the matter lies in the fact that the structure of a country is one of the contributing factors of choosing a place to take a trip to it. As a matter of fact, most people tend to see areas that have allegedly spectacular places to visit, and presumably, in regard to the humans' distinctive characteristics, neat places with an organized structure are more appealing to tourists. As a result, a country comprising old and wrecked streets, in tandem with unfashioned buildings, can alter one's opinion about it, which is only a matter of time before the country's image deteriorates by the scene of unsatisfactory formed there. However, there is an obvious distinction between old and even perilous structures and ancient buildings, and this idea supports the negative influence of old ones for the ground that ancient places are themselves critical appeals. For example, despite a countrys' magnificent attractions, having cracked and old streets could adversely affect tourists' opinions.
Another reason to be mentioned is that improving the environment has tremendous impacts on the behavior of its citizens. In other words, developing lifes' equipment and repairing old sections of a country precludes those specific areas become more impoverished and, consequently, hinders their inhabitants get accustomed to that arduous circumstances. Needless to say, when the attitude and of the people in a place improves, it seeds the plants of a more prosperous society in various aspects like economy, and tourists' attraction. For example, consider a distinct, which has a myriad of old buildings, and these are located in streets which are hazardous because of their age and peculiar formats. As it is evident, dwellers who live in these areas can not afford a better house. As a result, unproductive occupations start to grow, such as selling drugs and stealing, which not only does bring about corruption in society but also declines the number of tourists. It is clear to see why improving poor parts of a country by the government is of great importance.
Reflecting upon all the reasons mentioned above, one soon realizes that spending money on boosting and repairing damaged and old buildings and streets is more advantageous than ameliorating the security level for attracting tourists.
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, so, well, for example, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, in other words, in regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2480.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 473.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24312896406 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00969919919 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547568710359 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 773.1 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.2608786203 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.882352941 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8235294118 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.17647058824 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26785517879 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.074659704964 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586144229002 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169547341957 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0480756290945 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 11.7677419355 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.78 8.01818996416 122% => OK
difficult_words: 144.0 86.8835125448 166% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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