Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past.
In today’s progressive and competitive world where we live, scientific and education matters are the most important building blocks to the success of any society and its individuals. it is no secret to anyone that parents play a fundamental role in making well-educated and knowledgeable people. In this line of thought, there has been a controversial debate among people over this issue that whether parents today are more concerned with their children’s education or were parents in the past. Personally speaking, I think that parents nowadays are more obsessed with their children’s education than were parents in the past. My viewpoint is based on a few reasons, two compelling ones of which are elaborated upon hereunder.
The first vital point to bear in mind is that today almost most jobs have become more specialized and scientific thanks to the genesis of the technology, meaning that nearly all companies and business institutes are willing to hire individuals who are well-educated, knowledgeable and have academic degrees. In this vein, parents today have become aware of this widespread scientific and specialized environment, as a result, they have become more worried about their children’s learning and education because they like their children will be made a successful person and will be hired in a decent job in the future. However, in the past, as the level of population was still low and the world was not industrialized, lots of people followed the vocations of their parents and ancestors and worked at the early stages of their ages to help their family's subsistence. It can be derived that there was no necessity for parents to be involved in their children’s education in the past due to the simplicity of the past life and the lack of high-tech industries.
Secondly, it is crystal clear that with the development of education, most parents are well-educated so that they also expect their children to acquire a higher level of education. To put it in the other word, nowadays parents read more books than did parents in the past; furthermore, they have a much wider horizon than had parents in the past, so that they are willing to spend most of their time on the education of their children. Indeed, parents today have been informed well about the welfare level and social status that well-educated and knowledgeable people have in communities so that they are ready to do anything to boost the education of their children. Therefore, paving such a circumstance for their children, parents today provide their children with many opportunities to make them more educated and knowledgeable compared to the level they are at, which is why they nowadays pay more attention to their children’s education than ever before.
To put it in a nutshell, having considered all the aforementioned reasons, I do believe that parents today are more obsessed with their children’s education than ever before. Not only today’s industrial and high-tech environment make parents aware of the condition of jobs that their children will be supposed to engage in, but also parents have a willingness and desire that their children gain a higher level of knowledge and education than they did in the past.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, i think, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2713.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 529.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12854442344 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79583152331 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94065040215 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.444234404537 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 846.9 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.1344086022 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.1487900114 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 180.866666667 100.406767564 180% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.2666666667 20.6045352989 171% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.621163207525 0.236089414692 263% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.264447072615 0.076458572812 346% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.163537868373 0.0737576698707 222% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.455327433398 0.150856017488 302% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0730030840356 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.4 11.7677419355 173% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.95 58.1214874552 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.9 10.1575268817 166% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.07 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.0537634409 159% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.247311828 166% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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