People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment—doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Hectic life has a tremendous impact on our life. Indivduals today do not have time to perform their activities. From my vantage point, I believe that sophisticated life does not allow people to have enjoyed time for the following reasons.
To begin with, people have a lot of commitments to execute. For instance, I am a student and working part-time. I should study and work in order to pay my tuition fees, rent, bills, fuel, cars and health insurance. Also, I should prepare food and study when I come back to my home because I live alone. I immerse in life commitments. I do not have time to perform fun activities. On the other hand, before a few decades, when my father was studying, he was caming back to his home. He did not perform any work just studying. He had much time to have enjoyed time with their mates after he finished his homework. life's responsibilities were a few compared today.
Finally, having a fan need a lot of money. Most entertainments today are too expensive. For instance, as I mentioned before I am studying. If I look to change mood and have enjoyed time, I should pay money. Last week, I went with my friend to the American concert. I paid roughly 200 dollars for having fan. Not all students or people could afford these prices. On the other hand, before people could spent their time with their family and went to the park. Most activities were free. They did not pay money to have fan.
To wrap it up, having fan in these days is less compared than before because
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...re free. They did not pay money to have fan. To wrap it up, having fan in thes...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, if, look, so, for instance, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1248.0 1977.66487455 63% => OK
No of words: 273.0 407.700716846 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57142857143 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53490439975 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553113553114 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 391.5 618.680645161 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 20.1344086022 55% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.2718208793 48.9658058833 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 52.0 100.406767564 52% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 11.375 20.6045352989 55% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 3.125 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140664219496 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0416960074413 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547010171921 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0843591944995 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396184584236 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.8 11.7677419355 49% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.23 58.1214874552 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 10.1575268817 51% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.04 10.9000537634 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.78 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 86.8835125448 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 10.0537634409 64% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 10.247311828 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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