People work because they need money to live. What are some other reasons that people work? Discuss one or more of these reasons. Use specific examples and details to support your answer.
Some people start working from a young age, while others start their careers later on their life. This occurs due to individual’s different needs and situations. Money is, usually, the main incentive for work. But, what else drives a person to work? I will explain my ideas in the following essay.
To begin with, accomplishing our dream is the first and foremost reason why people work. I feel this way, because human beings share a common to design where they set their aspirations at a young age and work throughout their lives to achieve them. I have a compelling example that proves of this. When I was only seven years old, I dreamed of having a job. This can seem as a child trying to imitate her parents, and it certainly was in the beginning, however, one day I listened to my father read ‘The adventures of Don Quixote’ out load to the children my family was fostering, and on that day I decided that I wanted to be a writer. The joyful expressions that the children had in their faces led me to this decision. This desire grew in me growing up as well. It was an ambiguous goal, as I didn’t know whether I wanted to write, or help homeless children. Notwithstanding this uncertainty, I still worked hard every day to make my dream come true. In brief words, it is the possibility of making our drams our reality that drives us to work.
Furthermore, our parents’ expectations may lead us to devote ourselves to a career. This may either be because our parents want us to achieve great things, and develop ourselves as individuals or it may also come from their desire to see their unaccomplished dreams become true through their descendant’s work. More specifically, due to harsh conditions that were prevalent in the past, elders, like our parents worked as much as they could, but didn’t come to the point where they realize their goals. At such a case, they want their children to continue their job.
In conclusion, people work for many different reasons. It can be for making a profit, but it can also be to achieve their and their parent’s aspirations.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, well, while, i feel, in brief, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1751.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75815217391 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87950020729 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5625 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 64.5433286238 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.380952381 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5238095238 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178766689192 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0604533241893 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0639468337845 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123447320451 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0502107970492 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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