Question: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I agree with the statement that the rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
To begin with, many governments want to build a harmonious country and require all the people act and think in the same way, thus, young people have to obey the "rule" strictly and can never speak out their true feelings. Actually, different governments have different priorities and different ideal societies in their blueprints. For some governments, like China, harmony is the most important goal to achieve, because they do not want their people to tear the "contract" up and revolt against their sovereign and establish another "social contract". Building some consents in the society and let its people act and think in the same way is a great approach to attain their goal. Take the CCP (the Chinese Communist Party) as an example. During the coronavirus pandemic, the CCP asked newspapers to write stories about the crisis in a good way, like the commitment of the chairman and the contribution of doctors, and most news as well as speech that covered the sufferings of Wuhan residents and the death toll were censored.
In addition, nowadays' world is an elite world and those elites including scholars and tech elites cannot trust young people and want to control them tightly. Many elites nowadays hold the opinion that the free market of speech may cause hysteria in the society because people who firmly hold contrast ideas cannot finally reach a middle ground and start to criticize each other. Therefore, from their perspective, they themselves should put forward some consents or common views that can be never questioned or doubted, and spread those "golden laws" to average people like us. For example, many giant companies always want young people to work hard in order to make more profit for them, and therefore they try to persuade them that hard-working is a cherished merit and can help them lead better life. But actually that is only a myth, and practically, family background, skin color and gender can play more important roles in helping them to get promoted. Through the persuasion of tech giants, nonsense can become the "golden rule".
But I have to admit that young people now are much more free than those in last centuries. After the Civil Right Movement, the Feminist Activisms, and Pride Parades, young people become more and more inclusive and have more courage to break old rules that restrain their improvement.
In a nutshell, the authoritarianism and the elite control prevent young people from moving forwards in the recent society and they have to obey strict social rules.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eople to follow and obey are too strict. To begin with, many governments want to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in addition, as well as, to begin with, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 13.8261648746 217% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2258.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13181818182 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75020284751 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 675.0 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.2116785823 48.9658058833 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.533333333 100.406767564 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3333333333 20.6045352989 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.53333333333 5.45110844103 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186793110081 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0581285545767 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0839565127211 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194589428068 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.220048329443 0.0645574589148 341% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 11.7677419355 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.07 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.002688172 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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