Question: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Unemployment is a major concern of todays era. The people especially in my area, are whining most of the time about the same issue. There is a severe deficiency of good systems offering lucrative jobs to the applicants in all fields. Professionals whether in healthcare, engineering, teaching, biotechnology and all other fields are severely saddened and depressed at this state of affairs.
Henceforth, the idea of letting the opportunity of getting a secure job seems quite absurd. The horrors of unemployment and its negative impact is utterly damaging both to personal and professional life of an individual. Adverse effects can be seen quite clearly and evidently.Home environement gets miserable, filled with gloom and melancholy. Consequently, the equation with the housemates get tainted and marr'd. The beast of insecurity and inferiority complex is all the time lingering over one's mind. Overall, the productivity as well as mental and physical health of a person starts deteriorating and declining in such a devastating period of crisis.
Therefore, adhering to concept of striking the iron when it is hot, I would surely suggest to fully grasp this opportuntiy. As it's an old saying, "one cannot make an omelette without breaking the eggs". To avoid the horrible consequences of being idle and jobless, it is much better to get involved in a rewarding activity. A secure job is a dream come to many these days. We should never forget that "every cloud has a silver lining" and slow and steady wins the race. Persistence is the key to achieving our goals and getting our desired position in work. Destiny is a great decider of all events, hence we should let our faith strengthen us in our journey. Sticking to the quotation, "Heaven helps those who help themselves" Quran. In order to reach some prestigious position, hustling is the required approach. With a disposition based on optimism and humility, all challenges could be completed. All battles can be won, with a patient and steady mindset.
Conclusively, sitting idly in one's home just in the wait of a more satisfying job seems like a folly. An idle man is house of devil and one can never broaden one's horizon living an insular life. So, in summation, i would strongly disagree with the statement that presented above
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, hence, if, so, then, therefore, well, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1951.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14775725594 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06109541434 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635883905013 0.524837075471 121% => OK
syllable_count: 619.2 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.3462558376 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.2916666667 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7916666667 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.58333333333 5.45110844103 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140528623184 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0349828099592 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0398804598001 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0749287193703 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300273120215 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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