Question :Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records.Which approach do you prefer, and why?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
TPO56
In the modern era, due to the development of technologies, we can have access to pieces of equipment to record and keep our memories. For example, some people are used to take photos and upload them on social networking sites to keep a record of them. However, some people are not in favour of this opinion. I contend that for keeping a record of our memories and experiences, we do not have to upload them on social media. In what follows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint.
First and foremost, It goes without saying that different people have different financial ability, culture and beliefs, and all of these will be reflected in the way each person lives. For example, the places and ceremonies that we go to, or the clothes that we wear, or the friends who we hang out with all reflect our personalities and our beliefs and opinions. When we upload our pictures on social media, two things can happen. First, people might compare our lifestyle with other more wealthy people and negatively judge us on social media. As a result, their behaviour will negatively affect our lives and our relationships with our friends or our family members. For example, I remember a friend of mine used to upload her private pictures of her husband and ceremonies which they went with each other. Unfortunately, although she loves her husband at first, other people's opinions about her husband affect her life, and they got divorced after a while.
Second, many people may not have an acceptable financial ability. If we have a lavish lifestyle, uploading our pictures will hurt their lifestyles. For example, if we provide our children with expensive clothes, classes and so on, probably other poor parents will be embarrassed that they can not provide their children with these expensive facilities. So they will be depressed and disappointed.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, second, so, while, for example, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1537.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 312.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92628205128 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66717319832 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528846153846 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.7993340118 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.0625 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195309733098 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0773994210263 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700795182101 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147676007364 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0700502359943 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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