Question :Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records.Which approach do you prefer, and why?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Over the past few decades, with the lightning speed of technological evolution, social media plays a crucial role in every individual’s life. A lot of people started using social media and allocate a substantial period every day on social media. In this regard, some people think people should create records of their life experiences on social pages; meanwhile, others may hold different opinions that it is unsafe to expose everything about personal life. From my perspective, the former view contains more weight. I take the position on account for the following reasons.
The first reason that every individual has hidden talents that they might not have explored earlier. Social medial can be a life-changing platform where anyone can show their treasured abilities in front of the whole world and gain a lot of appreciation from people. My friend is a compelling example of this. My friend was a good actor in performing a drama and belongs to a small village near my city. Since due to not having enough opportunity in his settlement, he never able to show his talent to many people, yet he started uploading his acting videos on social media where he got a lot of responses from many viewers, and he became a celebrity suddenly on a social media which gave him a chance to perform in a big film. Had he not utilized social media platforms to expose his talents, he might have lost the opportunity to become a famous actor.
Another noteworthy point is that social media is an effective platform to share good memories by uploading pictures and videos with friends and family members, and it helps them maintain their strong relationships in the future. Individuals can keep motivated their close ones by commenting on their pictures and showing a little concern towards them, and as a result of that, it helps people feel intimacy with each other in their busy life schedule. On the other side, people who refuse to do this and never try to be a part of social media can readily lose their social bonding with others. To shed more light on this, although my close friend moved to a different country after her marriage, we never felt that we stay away from each other just because social media helped us to maintain our closeness. Whenever time permits, one of us always tries to share old pictures or videos that we took together, and it raises our mood since it reminds up of the great moments that we have with each other. Thus, it is reasonable to say that social media helps people to stay connected.
To warp it up, I believe that social media website is beneficial for people because it helps them feel closer during their hectic daily life. Also, it provides them with a great chance to showcase their talents in from of the whole world.
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, so, thus, while, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2283.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75625 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50391273671 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529166666667 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 718.2 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.9666146002 48.9658058833 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.157894737 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2631578947 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.63157894737 5.45110844103 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199481868459 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0637286997987 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0622034504761 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121897694856 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0594260313246 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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