The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
As you know our lifestyle are changing at a fast pace because of technology advancement and globalization and social norms, status, and value are also dramatically influenced. Some people says that social laws and rules for the new generations are getting more daunting while other people believes that actually its getting softer and easier to accomplish. To me, I firmly agree with the former opinion and in what follows I will elaborate on my viewpoint.
To begin with, laws are becoming more sophisticated and challanging as relations become more advanced and complex. In nowadays, international relations are broaden and involving more people from different races, sexual orientation, ethnics, religions and ages. To avoid conflicts, organizations, countries, international company and so on not only setting restrict on opinians like rasist and sexist, but also stressing people about to be careful about what they are saying and their actions. In my experience, when I was participating the first international student exchange, I did not know that calling a African American a black was offending. It took me lot of research and effort to not to say anything bias to to fellow particiapnts. It is definately challanging to always think before actions and words.
Next, world is much more competing than what it was 200 hundreds years ago. Thanks to democratic revolutions and human rights acvities, everyone start to has equal oppurtunity to everything. This bring equal rivals and competitions. Younger generations have to gain have a certain qualities ,which was hard to get everyone, such as high school certificates, university diplomas, and stable works have high salaries. I assume that my personal example can shed light on this notion. My friend was in depression because he could not graduate his university and always afraid of disappointing his parents. The views like one has to try his best at academic and non-academic and have to succeed in this competitive society can be very haunting.
In short, all of the aforementioned reasons lead us to draw conclusion that current social norms and viewpoints are hard to follow mainly due to the fact that its stress, complex, too much information to gather.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, so, while, as to, in short, such as, you know, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1876.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25490196078 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02719615271 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.633053221289 0.524837075471 121% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4253299934 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.352941176 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41176470588 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0809492000375 0.236089414692 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.019627873068 0.076458572812 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0304533236143 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0520642732688 0.150856017488 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0310650032465 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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