The rules that the whole societies today expect to young people to follow and obey are too strict
Rules are definitly the most important bottom lines citizens need to follow. Today, with the status increase of young people, societies begin to make a large number of rules which young people should follow. Some people consider such rules are too strict, while others hold an opposite view. From my perspective, I firmly disagree with the former statement.
To begin with, many rules for young people are related to their health, which are used to prevent them from building unhealthy bodies. To state it more clearly, school-age children today are forbiddaned for smoking. In the past, societies did not take school-age children's smoking issues as serious matters, which turned out to be countless patients with lung cancers caused by smoking today. One of the reasons for why there are so many such patients in the today's society is the negelection of controling the smoking issues during school-time in the past. Thus, since some of the rules are closely aimed at the young people's health, they are far from strict.
Besides, there are a big portion of young people who need to fulfill the study cources rules before they enter the job markets. These rules not only can let young people become more competitive, but also can help them find out their job interests. My cousin LuLu, who is a graduate student with two degrees, is a concrete example. She always follows the educational rules from the societies, and along with the enormously study experiences, she finally finds out the major which she truly likes. She also told me once that she got five offers from the top companies in my country even before graduation. Therefore, the rules towards today's young people can do them a lot benefits, and when compared with these good effects, these rules are not strict at all.
In a nutshell, even though today's societies make so many rules which young people should obey and follow, these rules are far from strict, because their purposes are to improve young people's health and education level, and young people do benefit a lot from those rules.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 151, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...f young people, societies begin to make a large number of rules which young people should follow....
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Line 5, column 460, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'todays'' or 'today's'?
Suggestion: todays'; today's
... there are so many such patients in the todays society is the negelection of controlin...
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Line 5, column 571, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ng school-time in the past. Thus, since some of the rules are closely aimed at the young pe...
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Line 5, column 620, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...he rules are closely aimed at the young peoples health, they are far from strict. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, so, therefore, thus, while, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1720.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95677233429 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32754565881 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550432276657 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0493116211 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.5 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6875 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.375 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.392336307733 0.236089414692 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129440496891 0.076458572812 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110541011118 0.0737576698707 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.283163951391 0.150856017488 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0922784824253 0.0645574589148 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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