Smartphones have caused more harm than good to our society.
Some people say that smartphones are more disadvantageous because smartphones affect the young generation in negative ways. I concede that smartphones have some disadvantages. However, I disagree with the statement and always beleive that smartphones have caused more good than harm to our society. I believe in this way for two reasons.
First of all, smarphone make the communication system more comfortable. We can communicate at every part of the world with in a second just with the help of a proper internet connection. I remember, when I was child, my father worked in a remote area of the country. My mother and grandmother wanted to communicate with my father with letter. Most of the time, it was time consuming and in extreme cases, they could not reach my father. As a result, we were always worry about my father. On the other hand, I am now working in an area, which is far away from my house. However, I have continuous connection with my mother and father. I can call then any time and I can also make video call with them with the help of smartphones, which takes very little effort and time. The smartphones help the poeple to stay together and make the family united. Thus, by improving communication system smartphones are doing good to our society.
Second of all, the whole world is now just at our palm, and this has become possible just because of smartphones. Smartphones are developing day by day, and with the help of these smartphone and the internet, we can get any information regarding anything. We no more need to face any kind of difficulties to get informations. For example, I have seen that my younger brother can do his undergrad research in home withe help of his smartphone. He can easily collect data from the online encyclopedia, and many research website, he even do not need to open the computer. On the contrary, when I wan in university, during my undergrad thesis research, I have do a lot of work just to search data and information. I needed to stay at the university library all day long and needed to search some gigantic books, which was too much tiring and boring. The development and availabiliy of smartphones make the imformation accessable, which make out life eaisier and more comfortable because this is the age of information and we often need to deal with lot of information.
In conclusion, smartphones may have some disadvantages, but smartphone has made our life easier and more comfortable. Therefore, I believe that smartphones have casused more good than harm to our society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 466, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'worried'.
Suggestion: worried
... my father. As a result, we were always worry about my father. On the other hand, I a...
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Line 5, column 505, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun research seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much research', 'a good deal of research'.
Suggestion: much research; a good deal of research
... data from the online encyclopedia, and many research website, he even do not need to open th...
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Line 5, column 536, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
...dia, and many research website, he even do not need to open the computer. On the c...
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Line 5, column 657, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'done'.
Suggestion: done
...ng my undergrad thesis research, I have do a lot of work just to search data and i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, regarding, second, so, then, therefore, thus, as to, for example, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2118.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 437.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8466819222 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93921474045 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489702517162 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 677.7 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.3250101109 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.72 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.48 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.48 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28851973118 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.097151705338 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.150361523689 0.0737576698707 204% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.285878415023 0.150856017488 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.202851673122 0.0645574589148 314% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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