Some famous athletes and entertainers earn millions of dollars every year. Do you think these people deserve such high salaries? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
This is a very debatable question. If we want to come up with some suitable answers to this question, we would need to look at the pros and the cons of this question, and then draw conclusions. Even then it would not be possible to directly answer. It would depend upon the kind of lifestyle we have, educational backgrounds, individual personalities and emotional concerns as well as the situation that we are in, and so forth.
In my opinion, that salary plays a crucial role in everyone's life and career is an undeniable fact.
Should people realize the significance of salary in their life and studies, they will ponder over it much more scrupulously.
These days, earning millions of dollars by famous athletes and entertainers has recently been the topic of debate among psychologist and people in our province.
I do believe that it is not fair that some people earn a lot of money and other people cannot gain their money of bread. There are a lot of different reasons with high value that support my point of view, and I would like to further illustrate a few of the most important ones in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, I want to mention one of the primary reasons that more than 60 presents of famous athletes and entertainers are not expert in their field. They become famous for their investing or with their relationships. As you know, these days a few manager and leader pay attention people's abilities. They attended their money, relationships and so forth.
The second reason why I advocate this point of view lies in the fact that we have a lot of useful people, such as scientists. I believe that people who are useful have to earn a lot of money. Do you think athletes and entertainers what they do us?? I want to answer this question. Not only do they happy us, but also they enjoy their activities. For example, a football player that he loves playing football, as a result, he did not have to earn a lot of money for his enjoyment. Why do not we give more money for scientists for their enjoying, indeed they enjoy their researching?
Last but certainly not least, thinking about this question more meticulously, I would like to mention this point that people should earn money with paying attention what their job is difficult. Mining is difficult or playing in a football game. If we want to have fair in our society, we will ponder over it much more scrupulously.
Having discussed the issue from that point of view, I would rather look at it from another perspective as well. Some of famous athletes and entertainers become famous for their hard working and abilities. I think that hardworking is one of the characters that we have to pay attention.
By taking all above-mentioned arguments into consideration, the following conclusion can be drawn about the issue. Underestimating the disadvantages of salary in people's life is not logical. Attending to this issue meticulously contributes to understanding which people desire to earn more salary, and can improve several aspects of personal as well as social life
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...lary, and can improve several aspects of personal as well as social life
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, second, so, then, well, for example, i think, kind of, such as, you know, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 76.0 43.0788530466 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2535.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 528.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80113636364 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79356345386 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82787350201 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467803030303 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 782.1 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5251009439 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.4137931034 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2068965517 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.10344827586 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 10.0 4.53405017921 221% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219246057299 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0607159027669 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0678299210479 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0992343841926 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0638225977356 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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