Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There are many awesome ideas that parents use it to raise their children in right and best way. And some parents rewords their school age children when they get a high mark or doing somethings good. So from my point of view I think this behavior has a positive impact, and i agree with the previous statement, and the impact of my view will be analyzed in this essay for further enlightenment on my agreement.
First of all, we can shape the children as we need, because they do not have any past experience. So if the parents need something from their children easily they can do it by different methods. For example when i was in the elementary school I remember I had to memorize the colors names and there was not any method best of memorizing with money.
Secondly, it is very important to rewards the children after a high mark because they feel sens of appreciation and their effort end with fruitful prize. For instance, after i finished my math exam and got the highest grade in my class I return to my home very proud, and my parents have to appreciate this achievement by $10. Moreover, by giving the child money after high grade they make him to learn faster because the money can challenge him to work and study harder. Even though some people do not prefer this method of raising i find this way very effective because we can learn them how to save their money, and how to save their effort in studying. For instance, I remember when I was 10 years old I bought all what I need from my saving money that I got it from my hard working on my studying.
In conclusion, i think my view is strong and solid enough to clarify why should on our parents offering money for every good mark, because simply they make those children very happy and looking for more improvement.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1460.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 328.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.4512195122 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37466926843 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521341463415 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 452.7 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.237119201 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.666666667 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3333333333 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 5.45110844103 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326413945061 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135881805896 0.076458572812 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104094329621 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213336394082 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0635659368059 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.83 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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