Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, persuading youth to get good grades at school by getting rewards like money is a controversial topic in society. I disagree with the statement that suggests giving cash per A+ grads because I firmly believe that permanently giving prizes like that have adverse effects on both student and their parents. In what follows, I will elaborate on my perspective.
First of all, money for good scores will cause adolescence always to expect external motivations to deal with difficult situations in their life. Recently, I read an interesting article about this subject. According to what I read, children who take cash for their results in school will be more dependent on external rewards for achieving their goals.
Secondly, when kids recognize good scores are equal to more money, they will focus on the ways which help them to reach the financial targets not learning the lessons well as a student. In my experience, students in this manner tend to cheat to get 100% of any exams results.
Finally, children regularly study 12 years for a school to get a diploma by this motivation model, mothers and fathers should pay more and more each year to satisfy their child because every year lessons become more complicated and need more effort to get high scores. To give an example, my younger sister always gets rewards for her up-level grades and then when she was senior in high school, she was the best in math and then asked a car instead of her success. While my father faced financial challenges, she persists on receiving her reward and so, put them under considerable pressure.
To sum up, according to all reasons as mentioned earlier I would go totally against with persuading by money because the pros and cons of this method are not equal and the side of disadvantages are heavier than advantages.
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finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1519.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 309.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91585760518 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58467681662 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.608414239482 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 459.9 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.6145062177 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.583333333 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.75 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224548167228 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0743707788103 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581171439184 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112432534473 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386497044895 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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