Some parent offer their school age children money for each high grade mark they get in school Do you think this is a good idea Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
In todays modern life with its galloping progress, education is prerequisite for everyone to meet the reuirements of high demend jobs in their future. This has been a great challenge for parents to stimulate their kids to study their lessons and make the most of their time. One widely utilized approach to drive childern toward studying is to give them money as a prize for good marks. Whether giving money would be proper motivation for young people or not is a matter of great debates. I-for one- subscribe to the idea that money is not an effective incentive for kids to focus on their studies, on the ground that they would not love their lessons, they would have serious issues with their motivations in the future, and it can affect their decision for chossing a career.
First of all, receiving money as a consequence of high grades would eventually change children's aim. To be more specific, they would see the money as they actual earning not the learned lessons, so they would put the money as their objective and do anything to obtain it even maybe cheating. They would not cherish the valuable lessons they can learn, instead they will see the classes a mean to aquire money.
Second, having money as their drive, children never can gain the ability of setting goals for themselves and try to concentrate on it. If parents let their kids to struggle with the challenge of aquiring good marks in school, they will learn how to focus when it is difficult to do so. They will obtain the experience and the knowledge of create their own motivation for reaching the goals, which would be extremely essential for their future. Moreover, they will be stronger in facing their life upcoming vicissitudes.
Last but not least, children who receive money as a reward for studying well would not be able to determine their favorite job in the future. Because, they study for making more money and when they confront with the real life, that definitely would not give them any money for only study, they will not be able to decide what career to choose for their life. Finally, this will lead to immense job dissatisfaction and therefore, an unhappy life.
All in all, I do believe that giving money to children to persuade them to study is a wrong idea because it would result in no liking the lessons, having less motivation for their future studies, and affecting their career and happiness. I think it is really important for parents to reconsider this idea and find a better option.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, may, moreover, really, second, so, therefore, well, i think, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2059.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74423963134 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42223331068 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490783410138 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 629.1 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.2998644802 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.117647059 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5294117647 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76470588235 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278046747651 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108237227051 0.076458572812 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0425446580771 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179875758811 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.025067262542 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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