Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
When it comes to the issue that some parent offer their children money for each high grade they get in school, some people may agree with this idea and give us sound reasons for their beliefs. On the other hand, some other people might disagree with this idea and have different opinions. Also, those opponents could provide us with strong purposes to support their thoughts. I believe that it’s a good idea that parent give money for their children as a reward because there are many reasons support my point of view. This short essay will demonstrate some point regarding this issue in the following paragraph:
First of all, in my opinion, it is widely understood that if parent offer money for their children when they get high grade, they will encourage them to study well. And eventually, they will work hard in order to reach their goal which is studying and success which is the most important purpose of there going to school.
Another reason why I advocate that is good to reward the children by given them sum of money for their successes. When the child work hard in order to get the reward, he will understand the value of the money. While buying new things for the child without any occasion, this will spoil him. Additionally this will be best way to learning the children how to earn money at early stage of their life without effecting on their study.
Finally, it is a well-established fact that the money is the best reward for children. If the child get money instead of any other gifts, he will learn how to save money to buy what he looking for. So, by this way the children will learn two things saving money and the value of the things.
From what has been discussed above, we may finally draw a conclusion that says, people who hold opposite idea may have the right to believe in that, but my opinion and other people opinions are overwhelming too much to be ignored.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, look, may, regarding, so, well, while, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1574.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 340.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62941176471 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24217979703 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505882352941 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.2703928567 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.428571429 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2857142857 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.28571428571 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.355856628594 0.236089414692 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131265211135 0.076458572812 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109889257295 0.0737576698707 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187669987968 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121660160546 0.0645574589148 188% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.01 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 86.8835125448 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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