Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
smartphone usage has become very common, as technology developed, especially among young children. Although smartphones provide numerous advantages, I believe that owning a smartphone for a young child is something parents have to have control over. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, today smartphones are not only a communication tool but complex devices that have internet access which causes distraction over children's concentration for their real-life responsibilities. even though the internet might be a great resource to reach information, it also contains a myriad of tempting social media applications, that children prone to lost themselves in this virtual world. For instance, about a year ago, my parents decided to buy a smartphone for my little brother who was only a ten-year-old boy. Their only intention was to be sure about his location and communicate with him when it is needed. However, in a very short time, my brother met with social media applications and he started to overuse his smartphone, even during his class times. also, he continued to this habit when the times he actually supposed to do his homework and other responsibilities such as feeding our cat and cleaning his own room. Consequently, my parents forbid him to use a smartphone and they took it back. he has been using a cell phone that has no access to the internet, since back then.
Secondly, it is very important for families to avoid redundant money consumption and smartphones are expensive due to their fancy features. young children tend to use their belongings harshly and carelessly. For example, they can easily break or damage their smartphones while playing a game on the outside or drop it while running. also, they might throw it away when they got angry at something, because of their lack of control of their emotional ups and downs. These kinds of accidents cause families to pay extra costs, so it is better for them to postpone buying a smartphone for their child, until the time he reaches the age to understand his responsibilities and acknowledges the value of money savings.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that owning a smartphone for children is harmful both for them and for their parents. this is because smartphones cause attention deficit on children and because they are expensive for families to buy as an extra expense.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, while, as to, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2016.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94701543939 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5625 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8937596206 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.0 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2222222222 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 5.45110844103 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208208288875 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0689601468034 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0354235489522 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125726452334 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0200821060232 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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